IOC

Offred's Back Again?? (IOC)

By Elena Rehberg 

The Passage

The Recording

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1jx86dCH9OrdybHQ__-lQmciLjBxzyui9/view?usp=sharing

(I missed the whole thing about saying your name at the beginning and cutting off at ten minutes... I'm sorry)

The Grading

Criterion A Score: 7/10

The commentary shows very good knowledge and understanding of the text; comments are supported by well-chosen references to the text. 

I marked myself in this section at the lower end because while I did demonstrate a good amount of knowledge and understanding, I think I lacked in explaining some context of the novel, as well as providing a little more background to Atwood's time period. 

Criterion B Score: 6/10

There is adequate awareness and illustration of the use of literary features, with understanding of their effects on the reader.

For criterion B, I marked myself in the higher end of the adequate section because I got a little scatter-brained once I got going and tried to focus on too many things at once. Since I did this, I got off track when trying to provide thorough explanations for my quotes and their significance, and I didn't discuss the impact on the reader much, but rather focused on society. 

Criterion C Score: 4/5

The commentary is well organized, the structure is mostly coherent.

I scored myself a little lower than what's expected just because I didn't stay under the ten minute mark, and also, I was somewhat scatter-brained near the conclusion of my discussion. 

Criterion D Score: 4/5

The language is clear and appropriate, with a good degree of accuracy in grammar and sentence construction; register and style are effective and appropriate to the commentary. 

In criterion D, I gave myself a mark below the best because while for the most part I used various words, I did repeat myself occasionally and apologized at the end of my voice recording, which might not be appreciated by my IB examiner.